Learning Outcome 4
I reviewed Daniel Richardsons first draft paper. While reviewing his paper I offered feedback on expanding his story and adding more details to give his reader a full picture. For example in the beginning of his writing I said, “I like how you went from a boring day to your favorite Tuesday but I think describing the “unpleasant mornings” and your day at work would of definitely pulled me in more. I think you should introduce Justine with a different memory and than add on like even though you enjoy this together but Tuesdays are better because…..”. I continued to review my other peers work in a way like this, because when we got together face to face reviewing our work, they stated that my input made them think of their writing in a different way than before. And give them more ideas. Going back to review my comments on my peers work, I notice that most of my comments were mainly on ideas and organization and local for the author. I focused on expanding their story and offering advice on where to place certain sentences or paragraphs. I also complimented what I liked.
